THESIS STATEMENT

Slums are dirty and just take up space, their are some sewages going threw the slum, some slums roads are made out of dirt so when they get wet it turns into mood, also plenty of houses are made out of scrap metal so it rusts and makes the rest look bad.

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Jose Naveja

Mrs. Jeager (section 6)

November 3,2011

Slums

Fun fact, there are more than 1 billion people living in slums today! Slums are a small community just squeezed together to make a lot of people live in a small place. Slums help us people in many, many ways.

Slums help us in many ways like for example, by shoving a lot of people living in a small area so it makes it prevents over population. “We are now in Kalberia the biggest slum in Kenya.” This quote show that there are some big slums in different places! Do you know how many people can live in slums?

Most people live in slums. In Google it is proven that 1 out of 7 people live in slums and if you didn’t know that is A LOT… That is a lot. There are in fact there are 1 BILLION people that live in slums! How do you think it will be to live in a slum ?

How is it to be in a slum? Musanga says that it is pretty bad site so I don’t think it will be very nice. It also has sewage going right threw the city. I think that is pretty nasty. Although so many people live in slums still doesn’t mean they have money. Slums are poor and they drink unpurified water so that is not so good.

There are more than 1 billion people living in slums. Slums are not the prettiest site. They have bad water that they drink but it is pretty bad and can get them sick. Living in a slum is pretty ugly. That is why people should appreciate what we have and value it.

            

introductory paragraph

 Slums help us in many ways like for example, by shoving a lot of people living in a small area so it makes it it prevent over population"we are now in Kalberia the biggest slum in kenya." this quote shows that there are some big slums in different places! do you know how many people can live in slums?

Outline

I.         Introduction

A.     their are more than 1 billion people living in slums

B.     a slum is were people live in a very tight area with a lot of houses

D.  slums help us in a lot of ways we don't notice

II.         Defendable Point #1

A.     slums help us by increasing our world population also helping us by the things they make.

B.     Supporting evidence

                                      i.  " we are now in Kalberia the biggest slum in Kenya."

                           C.  this shows that their are some big sums out their and the biggest in Kenya

D.    do you know how many people live in all those slums?

III.         Defendable Point #2

A.    one out of every seven people in the world live in slums.

B.     Supporting evidence

                                      i.    from google " 1 out of every 7 people live in slums."

                                C.     alot of people live in slums one out of seven is alot!

D.    how does it feel to be a slum?

IV.         Defendable Point #3

A.    how was it to be a slum?

B.     Supporting evidence

                                      i.     mysagansy says "it is pretty bad in a slum it is not a good site."

                                  C.    it is not soo pretty to live in a slum

D.    i learned alot

V.         Conclusion

A.     their are more than 1 billion people living in slums

C.   slums arent very pretty but they help us in many ways like making cloths

D.    how would your life be if you lived in a slum?